The pie charts below show the most common advantages and disadvantages of Bowen Island, according to a survey of visitors. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts below show the most common advantages and disadvantages of Bowen Island, according to a survey of visitors.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie charts provide information concerning the comparison between the benefits and drawbacks of Bowen Island. At first glance, it can clearly be seen that the half of advantages are connected to the high cost of living.
However
, the largest portion of the disadvantages is related to the people. Starting with the detail of the negative concerns, 50% of visitors
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complaints about the expensive price,
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a quarter of negative answers were about the entertainment. The weather responses based on the survey comprise 15%,
whereas
food quality is the lowest part of drawbacks with one in ten segments. With respect to advantages, Bowen Island is renowned for its people and scenery. Both of them held the highest segments at 42% and 35% respectively. Moving on to the comments about good accommodation and culture, the former accounted for by far the lowest chunk among the positive part at 11%, the latter shown at 12% of benefits.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • According to the survey
  • Visitors reported
  • The pie charts show
  • The most common advantages/disadvantages
  • A significant proportion
  • A small percentage
  • In contrast
  • Notably
  • The largest segment
  • Similarly
  • On the other hand
  • A major advantage/disadvantage
  • To highlight
  • Overall effect
  • Impact the experience
  • In summary
  • Illustrates
  • Reflects
  • Highlights
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