the diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured
The provided diagram explains the way by which instant noodles are manufactured.Looking from an
overall
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process is comprised of 8 main stages including storage of flour in silos and Linking Words
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At the beginning of the process,flour is stored in silos and Linking Words
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mixed in a container with two different substances: water and Linking Words
oil
.In the third stage,mixed flour with water and Use synonyms
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is transformed into drought sheets via specialized rollers.Use synonyms
Subsequently
,strips are created with the machine for cutting and portioning dough.
In the final stage of the process,ready dough strips are shaped into noodle discs followed by cooking with Linking Words
oil
and drying.After drying and cooking with the usage of Use synonyms
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, noodles are passed onto the next stage which fit into cups,added vegetables and spices, in order to make a full-bodied taste.Use synonyms
Finally
,noodles in cups are labelled personally and sailed to be sold in the market for consumption.Linking Words
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