The given bar chart illustrates the percentage of residents’ coffee and tea purchasing and consuming habits in last 4 weeks in five different cities (Sydney, Melbourne, Brisbane, Adelaide, and Hobart) in Australia.

The given bar chart illustrates the percentage of residents’ coffee and tea purchasing and consuming habits in last 4 weeks in five different cities (Sydney, Melbourne, Brisbane, Adelaide, and Hobart) in Australia.
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The bar chart illustrates the
coffee
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and
tea
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buying proportion and drinking habits of residents in Sydney, Melbourne,
Brisbane
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,
Adelaide
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and Hobart in the
last
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4
weeks
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.
Overall
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, Most percentage of
people
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in all the
cities
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went to a
cafe
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for
coffee
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or
tea
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in the
last
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4
weeks
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except in
Adelaide
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.
Least
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The lowest
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percentage of residents bought fresh
coffee
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. For the past 4
weeks
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, fresh
coffee
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sales were less than 50% in all the
cities
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, the highest in Sydney being just below 45% and the least in both
Brisbane
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and
Adelaide
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, slightly below 35%. In Hobart
people
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who bought instant
coffee
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marks just below 55% which is the highest in that category.
Brisbane
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placed second highest being just above 50% . Most
people
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in
Adelaide
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which is 50% bought instant
coffee
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. More than 60% in Melbourne went to a
cafe
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for
coffee
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or
tea
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and it is the highest percentage in all five
cities
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for the
last
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4
weeks
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. 55% of
people
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in
Brisbane
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prefer going to a
cafe
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for
coffee
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or
tea
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. Apart from
Adelaide
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, residents in all other four
cities
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preferred going to a
cafe
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, tea, brisbane, adelaide, weeks, people, cities, cafe with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "just below" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage
  • residents
  • habits
  • purchasing
  • consuming
  • illustrates
  • comparison
  • preferences
  • trend
  • frequency
  • café culture
  • observations
  • urban lifestyle
  • fresh coffee
  • instant coffee
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