The given bar chart illustrates the percentage of residents’ coffee and tea purchasing and consuming habits in last 4 weeks in five different cities (Sydney, Melbourne, Brisbane, Adelaide, and Hobart) in Australia.

The given bar chart illustrates the percentage of residents’ coffee and tea purchasing and consuming habits in last 4 weeks in five different cities (Sydney, Melbourne, Brisbane, Adelaide, and Hobart) in Australia.
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The bar chart illustrates the
coffee
and
tea
buying proportion and drinking habits of residents in Sydney, Melbourne,
Brisbane
,
Adelaide
and Hobart in the
last
4
weeks
.
Overall
, Most percentage of
people
in all the
cities
went to a
cafe
for
coffee
or
tea
in the
last
4
weeks
except in
Adelaide
.
Least
Correct word choice
The lowest
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percentage of residents bought fresh
coffee
. For the past 4
weeks
, fresh
coffee
sales were less than 50% in all the
cities
, the highest in Sydney being just below 45% and the least in both
Brisbane
and
Adelaide
, slightly below 35%. In Hobart
people
who bought instant
coffee
marks just below 55% which is the highest in that category.
Brisbane
placed second highest being just above 50% . Most
people
in
Adelaide
which is 50% bought instant
coffee
. More than 60% in Melbourne went to a
cafe
for
coffee
or
tea
and it is the highest percentage in all five
cities
for the
last
4
weeks
. 55% of
people
in
Brisbane
prefer going to a
cafe
for
coffee
or
tea
. Apart from
Adelaide
, residents in all other four
cities
preferred going to a
cafe
.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, tea, brisbane, adelaide, weeks, people, cities, cafe with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "just below" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage
  • residents
  • habits
  • purchasing
  • consuming
  • illustrates
  • comparison
  • preferences
  • trend
  • frequency
  • café culture
  • observations
  • urban lifestyle
  • fresh coffee
  • instant coffee
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