Some peopl think there should be free healy care for all people, but others disagree. Discuss both side and Give your opinion.

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A highly controversial issue today
relate
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health
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care, some
individuals
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think that
people
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are
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taking
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free
healthcare
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.
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,
Other
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Others
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are totally opposite from the notion. In
this
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essay, I am going to examine
this
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question from both
ponts
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points
of view, and
then
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give my own opinion on the matter.  On one side of
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the argument
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argument
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argument,
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there are
people
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who argue that
healthcare
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should be free for everyone. The main reason for believing
this
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is that everyone can get
treatment
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whether they are rich or poor. Most
of
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apply
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the
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apply
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rich
individuals
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are saved their lives by getting expensive treatments but
this
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is impossible for poor or
middle class
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ones. A particularly good example here is
, Cancer
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that cancer
is a fatal disease. Hina
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is a famous
indian
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tv actress. She cures herself by getting chemotherapy.
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, persons below the
pyline
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byline
cannot afford
such
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a
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expensive
treatment
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.
As a result
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, free
healthcare
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help
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helps
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individuals
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to get
treatment
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for fatal diseases
such
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as HIV, cancer
etcetra
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etcetera
On the other hand
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, it is
also
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possible to make
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an opposing
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case. It is
ofen
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often
argued that if
the
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apply
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healthcare
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free
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is free
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for everyone, no one can make money neither the government nor
healthcare
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professionals.
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Healthcare
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healthcare
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professional
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professionals
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always have
higher
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a higher
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chane
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chance
chances
to get
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of getting
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infections or
disease
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diseases
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very easily. So,
people
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have to work
on
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in
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such
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atmosphere
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an atmosphere
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should be rewarding. They should get some money for putting their lives in danger to cure others. Top on
that
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of that
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, it is difficult for
government
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the government
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too. It is not possible to make fully free
healthcare
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for
individuals
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. There are many other issues in
country
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the country
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to look after
such
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as
terorism
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terrorism
, education
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etcetera
. In conclusion, I believe both arguments have their merits, on balance,
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, I feel that
healthcare
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ought to
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less for
masses
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the masses
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since poor
people
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get
treatment
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same
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the same
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as rich
individuals
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. Saving lives has ground moral value.
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, it
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also
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diminished the difference between
poor
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the poor
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and
rich
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the rich
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.
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task achievement
Improve spelling and grammatical accuracy. Some common words have been misspelled such as 'health care,' 'people,' 'Hina Khan,' 'pylines,' 'often,' 'chance,' 'infection,' 'terrorism,' 'etcetera,' and others. Proper use of capitalization and punctuation will also be beneficial.
coherence cohesion
Make sure that both points of view are balanced in their word count and detail. The latter part of your essay summarizes the pros and cons, but it could delve into the opposing viewpoint more deeply.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph has a clear main idea and that supporting points logically follow from it. Your paragraphs sometimes mix multiple ideas which can confuse the reader.
task achievement
You present both sides of the argument clearly and provide relevant examples to support your points. This adds depth to your essay.
coherence cohesion
The essay covers the topic effectively, presenting arguments for both sides and giving an opinion. It demonstrates an understanding of the issue and provides some good points.
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