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The bar chart shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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This
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 bar chart illustrates the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011 and 2015. There are five
categories
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 for annual
earning
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 and each category has
$
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a $
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25,000 gap.
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, we can see there are three trends.
First,
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both less than $25,000 and $25,000 ~ $49,999
categories
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 had a slight rise from 2007 to 2011 and
afterthat
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after that
, it had a minor decrease from 2011 to 2015.
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between $50,000 and $74,999 had
a
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the
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 same figure during the given period. And
lastly
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,
left
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 two
categories
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 had an opposite trend with
first
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 case. It declined until 2011 and increased again after.
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 the
last
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 category, all bar graphs had a very minor change during the period.
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, the number of households who earn more than $100,000, surged after 2011. It recorded around 27
millions
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million
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 in 2011, but after 4 years, it became about 33
millions
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 households.
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, in 2015 people who earn more than $100,000 had the highest portion among all
categories
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 83%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words categories with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 2 times.
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