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General training -writing task 1 -Formal letter You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year old child.Write a letter to the parents .In your letter -explain why would like the job -give details why you would be a suitable person to employ -say how you spend your free time while you are in Australia

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Dear Madam, I hope you are in good health. I have seen a notice given in an Australian journal for employees who will look after your family for six months. As I am the elder one in my family that's why I have to look after my younger sister and I love to be an elder sister for her as I enjoy and have fun with her.
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, I am interested in doing daily household work and arranging the rooms keeping
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 in place. One thing for which I am suitable for
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 job is that I have been working as an employee in Sun kinder garden earlier.
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, I know how to handle a child with love and care and I have enjoyed painting and playing with them.
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, I used tricks to teach them numbers and alphabets
while
 playing with them. So, I am capable of the daily routine and caring for the kid as you mention in the magazine you need someone who can take care of your six-year-old child. As I mentioned earlier, I am the elder of my siblings I have
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 responsibility of looking after my sister when my mother goes to work and
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 leisure time I work as a science home tutor for sixth and seventh standards students so I have experienced in that role. It would be a great help if you could accept my application into consideration. Hoping to hear from you soon. Yours faithfully Sinja
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single idea per paragraph
Ensure each paragraph focuses on a single idea, but avoid overly long sentences to maintain clarity.
logical structure
Check for minor grammatical errors and improve sentence structure for a smoother flow.
suitable writing tone
The tone of the letter is formal and appropriate for a job application.
greeting and closing
The greeting and closing are appropriately used, creating a polite and respectful tone.

The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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