The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade*-labelled tea and pineapples in 2010 and 2015 in five European countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade*-labelled tea and pineapples in 2010 and 2015 in five European countries.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The table compares the
sales
of
tea
and pineapples in the countries namely, Austria, France, Netherlands, Norway, and Germany for the years 2010 and 2015. The income was measured in terms of Euros.
Overall
,
it is clear that
,
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the economy of
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the pineapples
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pineapples
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trade was very high when compared to
tea
sales
.
However
, their
business
was reduced in Norway and Germany
whereas
the beverage
sales
were
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increased in all the countries
inspite
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in spite
of
its
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their
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low profits over the period. In the year 2010, Austria was the
highly
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profited
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country among all in both
sales
.
However
, its income
on
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the fruits
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fruits
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business
which is 16
millions
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, was four times that
in
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of
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tea
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the tea
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trade.
Moreover
, the incomes of both
the
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trades were similar in the rest of the listed countries. With regards to the year 2015,
the
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tea
sales
were augmented in all the nations.
In contrast
, pineapple
sales
were
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dropped
down
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in Norway and Germany. The beverage
business
was
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doubled in Austria
whereas
the fruit market
was
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tripled.
On the other hand
, France was reported with a
tremondous
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tremendous
hike in
the
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tea
beverages sale
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beverage sales
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to about eight times
whereas
the pineapple
business
was
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increased by about three times.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, whereas".
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words sales, tea, business with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sales figures
  • Fairtrade-labelled
  • European countries
  • increase/decrease
  • growth/decline
  • trends
  • significant
  • noteworthy
  • highest/lowest sales
  • figures
  • comparisons
  • time frame
  • consistent growth
  • main trends
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