You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The pie graphs show the nutritional consistency of two dinners. Write a report to a university lecturer describing the data. You should write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The pie graphs show the nutritional consistency of two dinners. Write a report to a university lecturer describing the data.

You should write at least 150 words.
These two pie charts illustrate the nutritional consistency of medium baked
potato
and
macaroni
with five categories for nutrients :
Carbohydrates
, Protein, Glucose, Saturated fat and other nutrients.
Overall
, the portion of
carbohydrates
is the largest one in both foods. But medium baked
potato
has a protein
as
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second-highest one with 25% and
otherwise
macaroni
has saturated fat as
second-largest
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the second-largest
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one with 21%. And the
percent
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of glucose of baked
potato
and
macaroni
is similar. The gap between
of
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them is only 4%. The nutritional consistency
for
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baked
potato
is well balanced.
Carbohydrates
, the top nutrient in baked
potato
accounts
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account
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for 35% and when we sort the
percentage
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in order, the gap between nutrients
are all
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is
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less than 10%.
However
,
carbohydrates
for
macaroni
accounts for over 50%. And a
percent
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of saturated fat which has the second-highest portion of
macaroni
is 21%, so the gap between
carbohydrates
and fat is over 30%, which is quite big. It means
macaroni
is too
centered
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on
carbohydrates
.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words potato, macaroni, carbohydrates with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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