The chart and graph below give information about participants who have entered the Olympics since it began. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart and graph below give information about participants who have entered the Olympics since it began.

Summarise the information by selecting and  reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The following bar chart shows the gender proportion of the athletes competing in the Olympics from 1924 to 2012,
while
the line graph illustrates the total number of people taking part in the event in the given
years
.
Overall
, the participation of both genders increased sharply;
however
, the women grew in number in the following
years
,
while
the men saw a gradual rise in numbers. The total number of participants
also
climbed rapidly in the following
years
.
According to
the bar chart, the men remained dominant compared to their counterparts throughout the
years
. In 1924, the men numbered around 3000 and there were roughly 100 women. 1952 and 1984 experienced a slight boost in women's participation, interestingly; their participation peaked at around 5000 in 2012. Looking at the line graph, from the
years
1924 to 1952, we witness steady growth of athletes signing up but from 1984, the registration grew exponentially, reaching its highest point, above 10000.
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