Some people think that essence of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taught to co-operate rather than compete become more useful adults. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

Nowadays, education serves various roles in society, spanning social, economic, and personal domains.

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, it assists in improving every aspect of life

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socialisation, and behavioural relation with society . Some say that

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competition should encourage adults

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others argue that participation is enough to grow their

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.In the forthcoming paragraphs, I shall explain my point of view. In my opinion, competition among the students will exacerbate existing issues of poverty, inadequate healthcare, and insufficient educational opportunities .

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,

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trend of pedagogy will lead to chaos among the other children as reaching that level is not

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for every pupil.

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, my younger brother prepared for the IIT JEE

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so he could get admission to a particular college.

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he was a topper in his previous class

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he struggled for 3years to crack

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like the IIT .

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I firmly believe that competitional

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were decreasing the rate of employment because for everyone it is not a piece of cake to juggle with these specific

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qualifying for all these

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needs time and money perhaps contesting all entrance

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another private tuition to be prepared for every competitive paper

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as the NEET

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for medical entrance .

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,the educational system encompasses meaningful learning and the development of critical thinking, problem-solving and lifelong learning skills and

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will be engaged in all these competitive

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for various fields of profession.

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, youngsters who have an interest in maths and science must have curiosity about that field of subjects and

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sheer pressure will encourage them to achieve their goal in terms of these entrance

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all these challenges will lead to benevolent leaders for our upcoming generation. In conclusion,

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competition leads to appointing the best examples for others as a remarkable and intelligent student.

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which loss of hope and time leading to heightened levels of unemployment.