Some people think that it is more beneficial to take part in sports which are played in teams, like football, while others think that taking part in individual sports, like tennis or swimming, is better. Discuss both veiws and give your opinion.

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task achievement
Provide a clear thesis statement in your introduction which outlines what your main points will be. This makes your essay easier to follow and shows examiners that you have planned your response.
task achievement
Make sure to fully develop each main point with specific examples or detailed explanations. Avoid stating ideas without properly supporting them with evidence or examples.
coherence cohesion
Organize your essay into clear paragraphs, each with a single main idea. This will help with logical structure and make your argument more coherent. Use linking words to connect ideas within and between paragraphs.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that you have both an introduction and a conclusion. The introduction should set the stage for the discussion and the conclusion should summarize your main points and restate your opinion.
coherence cohesion
Be mindful of grammar and spelling errors. Proofread your work to avoid mistakes such as missing articles, incorrect verb forms, and spelling issues.
task achievement
You have identified both sides of the argument, which shows a balanced understanding of the topic.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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