Some people think that it is more beneficial to take part in sports which are played in teams, like football, while others think that taking part in individual sports, like tennis or swimming, is better. Discuss both veiws and give your opinion.
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Provide a clear thesis statement in your introduction which outlines what your main points will be. This makes your essay easier to follow and shows examiners that you have planned your response.
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Make sure to fully develop each main point with specific examples or detailed explanations. Avoid stating ideas without properly supporting them with evidence or examples.
coherence cohesion
Organize your essay into clear paragraphs, each with a single main idea. This will help with logical structure and make your argument more coherent. Use linking words to connect ideas within and between paragraphs.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that you have both an introduction and a conclusion. The introduction should set the stage for the discussion and the conclusion should summarize your main points and restate your opinion.
coherence cohesion
Be mindful of grammar and spelling errors. Proofread your work to avoid mistakes such as missing articles, incorrect verb forms, and spelling issues.
task achievement
You have identified both sides of the argument, which shows a balanced understanding of the topic.
Include an introduction and conclusion
A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.
The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.
The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:
Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation
Example:
To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported.After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.
Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:
Tourism around the world is developing and the number of tourists visiting in the country is also increasing. This has led people to create two groups, one who so supports the host country, that should accept diverse cultures for those visitors while the other group believes that the tourists should explore and follow local customs and traditions. I support the second statement.
In the technology-focused world, humans might be forced to pay with electronic cards or via smartphones and there would be no need to pay by cash. However, it may be neglected by some groups because of some reasons.
Some believe that history plays a significant role in students’ life compared to other school subjects, while others think that science and technology play this a more important role these days. In my opinion, history is not as much important as science and technology, and I will discuss my reason below.
People's opinions differ as to whether or not school children should be given homework. While there are some strong arguments against the setting of homework, I still believe that it is a necessary aspect of education.