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the graph below shows the use of solar energy of four different countries

the graph below shows the use of solar energy of four different countries
The line chart below displays the
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 of power from the sun in the USA, Germany, Japan and China.
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, America and China's
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 of solar power increased significantly over the entire time
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. Japan's
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 decreased gradually and Germany's remained relatively stable. The United States was the biggest consumer of solar energy in 1995 with just below 8,000 and increased consistently every year to around 18,000 in 2015. China was the lowest
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 user at the start of the
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 at around 1000, but steadily increased to just over 2000 over the next 10 years, before increasing consumption dramatically to become the second highest consumer with nearly 12,000 in 2015. Japan's
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 began the recorded
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 with around 6,000 and
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 consistently dropped year on year to just below 4,000 in 2015. Germany's value hovered between approximately 2,000 and 3,000 throughout the entire 
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words use, period with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just below" was used 2 times.
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