The map and chart below show the information for the global willingness to eat insect products and the current price for certain food available on the market place.
The following map and chart
represents
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represent
the
information about the global willingness to eat insect Correct article usage
apply
products
and the prices of various food
available on the recent Fix the agreement mistake
foods
market place
, indicated in percentage and US Correct your spelling
marketplace
Dollar
per kilogram, respectively.
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Dollars
Overall
, it can be clearly observed that developed countries seem to have fewer pecentages
of the will Correct your spelling
percentages
percentage
in eating
insects, Change preposition
to eat
whereas
that
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of
those developing countries noticeably have higher figures. Change preposition
apply
However
, it is intertestingly
to note that China and Africa Correct your spelling
interesting
interestingly
having
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have
a reverse results
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reverse results
a reverse result
unlike
the others. Add the comma(s)
, unlike
Moreover
, it can
is obvious Verb problem
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to see
that Verb problem
apply
the
wildlife Correct article usage
apply
products
gain larger
sum per unit, Correct article usage
a larger
while
that
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of
those basic meats and Change preposition
apply
products
are cheaper.
To begin
with, the research found that at 71%, Mexicans has
the highest percentage of willingness to eat insect Correct subject-verb agreement
have
products
among all other developing nations, followed by, Peruvians, Thais
, at 58% and 56%,respectively. Correct word choice
and Thais
On the other hand
, the number of peoples
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people
agree
to try insect Correct pronoun usage
who agree
products
from developed countries such
as the States, the United Kingdom, Spain, Russia, Australia
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and Australia
are
less than 40%, except China and Japan, at 44% and 21% only.
In regards to the food prices, basic meats and ingredients that Correct subject-verb agreement
is
consumed
universally Add a missing verb
are consumed
such
as red meats, pultry
and Correct your spelling
poultry
rices
are Change the wording
rice
kinds of rice
packets of rice
grains of rice
in
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at
lower
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a lower
price
than those wild Fix the agreement mistake
prices
products
of no more than 3.5 USD
/kg
. Beef
was the only Add an article
The beef
products
that reached its Fix the agreement mistake
product
peaked
among other Change the form of the verb
peak
product
in Fix the agreement mistake
products
this
group at 3.03 USD
/kg
, whereas
Thai Hom Mali rice only
price Add a missing verb
was only
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at 0.78USD
0.78USD
/Correct your spelling
0.78 USD
kg
. Comparing
with the wild Wrong verb form
Compared
products
, Weaver
ant was the most expensive among all wild Correct article usage
the Weaver
products
at 10.65 USD
/kg
, while
female
Giant water bug Correct article usage
the female
only
worth Add a missing verb
was only
one fifth
of the Weaver ants.Add a hyphen
one-fifth
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