The bar chart below shows the numbers of men and women attending various evening courses at an adult education center in the year 2009. The pie chart gives information about the ages of these course participants.

The bar chart below shows the numbers of men and women attending various evening courses at an adult education center in the year 2009. The pie chart gives information about the ages of these course participants.
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shows 4 courses for an adult education centre in the year 2009 that more than number of people means about 60 people include 20 women and 40 men attending the course language and
after
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course, painting with about 52 people attend higher than courses drama and sculpture that includes 30 women and 22 men and about course drama attends is 30 folk and
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the lowest attends related to sculpture that 13 peoples include 10 women and 3 men the pie
chart
shows
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the percent
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per cent
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attending the courses that more than
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include 50 or over age with 42%
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dark orange and the lowest attends related to aged under 20 with 5%
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blue and another of
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more than attend is 40-49
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that include 26% to
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orang and the yellow
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is
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30-39 with 16% and
this
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green
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is 20-29
ages
with 11%
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