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The table and pie charts below show the number of research students in Australian universities in 2001 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table and pie charts below show the number of research students in Australian universities in 2001 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given table and pie charts indicate how the number of
research
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students
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 in Australian universities changed from 2001 to 2010.
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,
it is clear that
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 there was an increase in the number of
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students
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 during
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 period.
In addition
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, the figure for local
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 outnumber that for international
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.
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, the proportion of
gender balanced
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 comparatively. In 2001, the data on domestic
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students
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 was 33,657, compared to about 5,192 for global
research
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 scholars. After 9 years, there was a sharp increase to 39,488 and 14,593 in the figure for both researchers respectively. In terms of gender, in 2001, the proportion of native researchers accounted for 87%, compared to 13% for that of foreign
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students
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. After 9 years, the figure for
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 of domestic
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students
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 witnessed a slight decrease to 73%, with 38% females and 35% males.
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, there was a sharp go up to 27% in the data on overseas
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students
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, where females and males were 15% and 12% respectively.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 78%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words research, students with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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