The table below shows the results of surveys in 2000, 2005 and 2010 avout one university. Summarise the information and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the results of surveys in 2000, 2005 and 2010 avout one university.

Summarise the information and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The table depicts the
percentage
of students in
an
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university for various
aspects
in
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the year
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year
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years
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2000, 2005, and 2010.
Overall
,
print
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the print
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resources's
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resources
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category
become
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becomes
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the most
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important aspects
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aspects
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aspect
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with
highest
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the highest
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presentation.
Otherwise
,
range
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the range
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of modules offered got
a
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the
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least ranking among other
aspects
. Technical
quality's
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quality
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aspect
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aspects
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experienced fluctuations from time to time. In 2000, the
percentage
was 65 and slightly increased to 63 per
cent
.
Then
, increased
at
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to
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69 per
cent
in 2010.
Another
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category
, in 2000, print resources got 87 per
cent
. And, increased by 2 per
cent
. Unfortunately, in 2010 the
percentage
was lower at 88 per
cent
.
Category
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The category
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of electronic resources was one and only
aspects
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aspect
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that experienced a
significantly increased
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significant increase
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. In 2000, the
percentage
was below 50 per
cent
. In 2005, successfully
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jumped
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to 72 per
cent
and rose
up
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apply
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again
until
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to
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88 per
cent
.
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range
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the range
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of modules offered's
category
, from year to year, always decreased. Respectively, 32 per
cent
, 30 per
cent
, 27 per
cent
.
Last
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category
, building/ teaching facilities
was
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apply
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remain
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remained
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at 77 per
cent
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, aspects, category, cent with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • survey results
  • teaching quality
  • facilities
  • student satisfaction
  • support services
  • trends
  • ratings
  • infrastructure
  • utilization rates
  • feedback
  • university policies
  • available services
  • evolution
  • main features
  • comparisons
  • relevant
  • analyzing
  • overview
  • discussing
  • exploring
  • examining
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