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Band 4.5

Although the prices of fuels have greatly increased over the last decade or two, it is argued that further increases in fuel prices are the only way to reduce world consumption of fuel and lessen pressure on the world’s fuel resources. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Introduction
However
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,the
cost
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 of
fuel
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have
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has
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 grown in one or two
recently
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recent
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decade
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decades
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 and
ther
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there
 are some
discution
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decisions
 that
said
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say
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increse
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increasing
 the
cost
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 of
fuel
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 is the only way
for using
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to use
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 less than
world`s
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the world`s
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fuel
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. I do not agree with
this
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 opinion and there are some more
solution
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solutions
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 for
this
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 matter which are;
firstly
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, using the
vehichels
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vehicles
 that work by water or electricity.
Secondly
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, considering fines for
thoes
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those
 who
use
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 more than the allowed
amount
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 of
fuels
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fuel
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.
Body paragraph 1
First,there are some new cars that
use
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 water or electricity
for
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to
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 move. Today a lot of
car
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cars
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 have
invented
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been invented
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 that do not
use
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fuel
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 like petrol they just need
elecerisity
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electricity
 and have been made some
station
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stations
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 for charging them in some countries. Creating more cars and
station
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stations
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insted
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instead
 of increasing the
cost
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 of
fuel
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 is a better way
for
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to
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dicrese
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decrease
diverse
 the world`s
fuel
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resource
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resources
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.
For
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example
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example,
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people
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 who
are
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apply
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pay for
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cost
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the cost
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 of
fuel
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 can
easly
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easily
 pay
for buying
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to buy
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 a new car that
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use
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uses
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 only water or electricity for their
movments
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movements
movement
 around the world
also
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this
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 matter can improve the
amount
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 of production and jobs.
Body paragraph 2
Second,
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Creating the low
that is
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 paying
fine
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a fine
the fine
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 for using more than enough
of
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apply
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fuel
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 in a
limitted
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limited
 period.
Body paragraph 3
When governments make
this
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 ruel
people
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 try to
use
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less
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apply
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their
car
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cars
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 that make
this
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apportunity
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opportunity
 which is feel the
amount
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 of
fuel
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 and
alternative
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an alternative
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 something like
bike
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a bike
the bike
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 that
improve
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improves
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 the
helth
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health
 amoung
people
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 and
also
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 the
trafic
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traffic
 around the world. For
examle
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example
, when
people
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 know that they have to
use
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 an
amonunt
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amount
 which is
limitted
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limited
 they think and if they do not, they must pay
extera
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extra
 money they
force
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are forced
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 to manage the
amount
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 of
fuel
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using
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used
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.
Conclusion
In conclusion,
shoot
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shooting
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 the
amount
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 of
fuel
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pricec
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prices
price
it
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apply
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is not the only solution for less using
world`s
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the world`s
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fuel
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resorce
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resources
also
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 it is making some new
vegicles
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vehicles
 or making new rules.

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coherence cohesion
The essay needs a clearer structure. Ensure that each paragraph has a clear point related to the topic and use connective words for smooth transitions.
coherence cohesion
Work on grammar and sentence structures. For example, pay attention to subject-verb agreement and correct usage of articles.
task achievement
Provide more specific examples and details to strengthen your arguments. This will help in demonstrating a deep understanding of the topic.
coherence cohesion
Improve your introduction by more clearly stating your position on the topic. Conclude by summarizing the main points discussed.
task achievement
The essay presents two main solutions to the problem, showing an attempt to fully address the task.
task achievement
The writer makes an effort to provide examples, which is positive. Continue to develop this skill by making examples more specific and detailed.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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