You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

You should write at least 150 words.
The line chart illustrates the percentage of the
population
from 65 years old and above, from 1940
snd
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and
2040 in three
nationts
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nations
( the
USA
,Sweden, and Japan).
Overall
, the percentage of elderly people is increasing over
entire
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the entire
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period, it is
producting
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producing
the highest proportion will be in Japan in the future. The
population
aged 65 and over in the
USA
at the beginning of the period
it
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started
around
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10%,
then
it increased to 15% in 1980
,
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and remained at the same level, but it will be increasing to about 25%.
While
in Sweden's
population
aged began
around
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7%
then
it increased to nearly 15% , which is less than the
USA
population
aged,
however
, by 2020 it had
been
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raising
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to 20% more
that
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than
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the
USA
,
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and it will be growing to 25% in 2040. Japan's
population
aged 65 and over was the lowest percentage exactly 5% in 1940,
then
it increased slightly to about 10% in 2020. It
project
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that it will increase to the
highst
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highest
level over 25% in 2040 more than other countries.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, usa with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion
  • population aged 65 and over
  • trends
  • upward trend
  • significant increase
  • decrease
  • specific points in time
  • starting point
  • ending points
  • highest proportion
  • lowest proportion
  • given period
  • timeline
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