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SMore and more transitional companies are setting up their business operations in economically developing nations. In this essay, I will discuss about some benefits and drawbacks of the inhabitants who live in those countries.

#smore #companies #business #operations #nations #inhabitants #countries
In the era of growing the
economical
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 conditions for every
enterpreneur
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entrepreneur
, opening their branches for the operations of making their products that require general labour, in the
countries
 that are in the developing phase, has
became
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 a good option to grow economically.
Although
this
 trend brings numerous wonderful merits to these
companies
, it has demerits too that
i
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 will discuss in
comming
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coming
paragaraphs
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paragraphs
. In considering the benefits to local people of that country, first and foremost,
this
 way of operating a
business
,
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 offers numerous job opportunities to
jobseekers
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job seekers
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 as they get chances to
to
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highered
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higher
 in those
companies
 with good earning rates.
Thus
, it provides
then
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them
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better
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 way of living with the assistance of wage rates that they earn from those
enterpreneours
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entrepreneurs
 who operate these
type
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types
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 of
bussinesses
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businesses
 in their
countries
. To support
this
, in Asia, numerous highly renowned organizations
has
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oppened
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opened
 their headquarters in the
countries
 where they
able
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 to generate their
business
 through that
countries 's
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 general labour,
for instance
, H&M ,
tommy
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Tommy
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hilfigure
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brands operate their basic
clothes making
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clothes-making
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 operations in India, Nepal or even in Bangladesh at lower wages, but workers able to get
jobs
 to meet with their daily needs in those developing
countries
.
On the contrary
, the plethora of disadvantages of
this
 trend can not be neglected that it offers to civilians of
that
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countries
. The primary factor that needs consideration is that when local people get
jobs
 through these
companies
 with good payscales, tie them with those particular
companies
 only and they forget about other highly sophisticated
jobs
 in the market with whom they can work and earn better with time as in future their chances of growth will be higher as
compare
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 to where they are working right now
due to
 the reason that they have
stable
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 job with
unflutuate
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unfortunate
earnings to
fulfill
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 day to day responsibilities. To illustrate
this
, some other local
companies
 that are grappling to get good businesses in their own
countries
, offer employees better
carrer
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career
 growth with higher positions ,
on the other
hand
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companies
 that just opened their branches in other foreign
countries
 to grow
business
 only,
offers
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less
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fewer
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 opportunities to grow and allow them to get stuck on particular general labour role by giving incentives to lock them with their
business
 only. In conclusion,
while
 the importance of
operaing
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operating
business
 in other nations is evident to allow the locals to get
jobs
, the
avilable
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available
 drawbacks should not be neglected
on
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 the local citizens,
therefore
 proper consideration is required to implement good decisions to help the local inhabitants.
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coherence cohesion
Check for consistency in tense, grammar, and sentence structure to improve overall clarity.
coherence cohesion
Proofread the essay to correct spelling mistakes and typos such as 'enterpreneours,' 'highered,' and 'tommy hilfigure.'
coherence cohesion
The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, providing a coherent flow.
task achievement
It includes relevant specific examples, like mentioning brands such as H&M and Tommy Hilfiger.
task achievement
The main points are adequately supported, with clear benefits and drawbacks mentioned.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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