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it is important for everyone including young people to save money for their future agrre os diasgree

#people #money #future #agrre #os #diasgree
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people
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 believe
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 very essential to save
money
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 even for young
people
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 for their future.In my opinion, I completely agree with
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 statement and l believe that saving
money
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 can affect our lives in a good way. first of all, I believe having a good amount of
saving
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 can do a lot for our living for adults and young in nowadays, in fact, saving can handle a lot of problems and
by
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 a lifesaver. specifically for adults they must save
money
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 for their children now days we
didn't
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 know what will happen in
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the
 hospital or school
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Considering
 my sister
sadan
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Sadan
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, a single mother who works as
teacher
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a teacher
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 her
emergencies
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emergency
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saving
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 allowed her to cover her brother operations without debt. you can manage unexpected things.
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, having savings allows young
people
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 to be less dependent on others. and they will learn
self cntrol
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self-control
 and they will have good
live
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 management
.my
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My
 mom helped me to save
money
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 when a am a kid
this
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 helps me a lot now to
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 my own business. in conclusion, we should teach young
people
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 and adults to save
money
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 for save live
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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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