The table below gives information about a bakery's average sales in three different branched in 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The table chart illustrates data about

ther

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the

their

average sales of a bakery in three stores in 2015.

Overall

Vancouver

Georgia

Street

was the most popular

branch

with the highest transaction

value

while

Vancourver

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Vancouver

Drake

Street

has

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the lowest

numbers

. The average number of transactions at

Vancouver

Gerogia

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Georgia

Street

was 854 with 10.96 dollars transaction

value

numbers

of eat-in and take-away were 405 to 449, and the most popular item was

Chicken

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a Chicken

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burger.

While

Dunsmuir

Street

barnch

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Barnch

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was the second

popular

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most popular

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bakery with

number

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a number

the number

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of transactions less than

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the pervious

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pervious

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branch

by nearly 100, and the transaction

value

was 5.61 dollars, both

numbers

of eat-in and take-away were 358 to 392, and the most popular item was chicken wings.

Vancouver

Drak

Street

branch

was

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had

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the lowest

numbers

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number

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transactions

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of transactions

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390 , but it had more

value

around 9.02 than

Vancouver

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the Vancouver

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Dunsuir

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Dunsmuir

Street

branch

. Both

numbers

of Eating

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apply

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and take-away were 200 to 190 respectively, and the most popular item was Chicken pasta.

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2Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
5Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
16Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

160 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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