The table below gives information about a bakery's average sales in three different branched in 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below gives information about a bakery's average sales in three different branched in 2015.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The table chart illustrates data about
ther
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the
their
average sales of a bakery in three stores in 2015.
Overall
.
Vancouver
Georgia
Street
was the most popular
branch
with the highest transaction
value
,
while
Vancourver
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Vancouver
Drake
Street
has
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had
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the lowest
numbers
. The average number of transactions at
Vancouver
Gerogia
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Georgia
Street
was 854 with 10.96 dollars transaction
value
,
numbers
of eat-in and take-away were 405 to 449, and the most popular item was
Chicken
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a Chicken
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burger.
While
Dunsmuir
Street
barnch
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Barnch
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was the second
popular
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most popular
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bakery with
number
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a number
the number
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of transactions less than
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the pervious
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pervious
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previous
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branch
by nearly 100, and the transaction
value
was 5.61 dollars, both
numbers
of eat-in and take-away were 358 to 392, and the most popular item was chicken wings.
Vancouver
Drak
Street
branch
was
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had
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the lowest
numbers
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number
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transactions
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of transactions
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390 , but it had more
value
around 9.02 than
Vancouver
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the Vancouver
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Dunsuir
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Dunsmuir
Street
branch
. Both
numbers
of Eating
in
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apply
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and take-away were 200 to 190 respectively, and the most popular item was Chicken pasta.
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