The graph illustrates how crime rates altered in Panama City during the period 2010-2019. We can see immediately that the greatest change occurred in the number of burglaries, while incidents of theft remained low but steady.

The graph illustrates how crime rates altered in Panama City during the period 2010-2019. We can see immediately that the greatest change occurred in the number of burglaries, while incidents of theft remained low but steady.
The given bar chart depicts the transmute rates of crimes in
panama
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city in three different
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in the
year
starting from 2010 to 2019.
overall
, we can see the
grow
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in burglary starting in 2010 after that it climbed slowly .Moving
to
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car theft it kept
quit
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quiet
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the same between the
year
2010 to the end of 2012
as well as
, started to be
unastable
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unstable
the
folowing
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following
year
.
However
,
robery
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robbery
Robert
stayed the same throughout the years .
Moreover
, the highest rate
in
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burglary was in 2011
then
it started to decrease until it
sudenly droped
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suddenly dropped
.In
adittion
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addition
car theft has stayed the same
the
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past three years after that we can see
the
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fall in 2013.
furthermore
, car theft climbed up again in 2017 .
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,robbery
was
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leveled
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off
thoughout
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throughout
the years until the
year
2017 the rate of
roberry
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robbery
berry
has
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increased.
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