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The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks like now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.

The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks like now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.
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The diagram illustrates the blueprint of
central
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 library and how it has changed after 20 years .
Overall
, there
are
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 considerable transformation over these years from a less attractive book
room
 into the finest and
enjoyable
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most enjoyable
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 place to study. As we can see, 20 years ago,
less section
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fewer sections
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 and entertainment were provided for the public to explore compared to the
new
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 renovated
oned
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one
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.
Firstly
, children's books have
being
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 relocated to the opposite side
whereas
previous
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the previous
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 was a computer
room
, meanwhile,
old
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children
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children's
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room
had
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 replaced with a new lecture
room
.
Suprisingly
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Surprisingly
, two sofas and more
activites
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activities
 are added to
youngster's
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the youngster's
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 section with
extended
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an extended
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 size.
On
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 the middle parts of the library, only adult fiction books remained but
has
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 moved across the
room
 to fill with new all reference books.
In addition
, a brand new information desk and self-service machines were placed
altogether
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 with
adult's
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 sections.
Lastly
, after the entrance of the library, there will be
computer
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room
 on the left and
cafe
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a cafe
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 shop on the right side that
have
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 been shown
on
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 the second picture to relax and to do
reseach
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research
.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words room with synonyms.
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