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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
#minutes #proportion #population #three #countries #information #features #comparisons
The line graph illustrates the percentages of the population in elderly groups
age
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of
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65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three diverse countries namely Japan, Sweden and
USA
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the USA
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. As we can see, Japan
has
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had
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lower
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a lower
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 starting point among the others in 1940 with only 5%. Unfortunately,
this
paces
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continue
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continued
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 to drop and eventually steady for almost 22 years before
reached to
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 a peak point of 26% rates in 2040
that
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marked
the
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higher numbers compared to
other
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the other
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 two countries. Meanwhile,
in
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Sweden,
shown
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shows
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 a
fluctuate
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 trend.
However
, after 100 years, a positive direction ended with 25% in numbers.
Lastly
, in 1940, America
country has
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had
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 a higher score of population in the ageing category with 9% in figures but
suprisingly
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surprisingly
has
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had
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 fewer as opposed to the Japan and Sweden
country
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countries
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 in 2040.
Overall
, all three countries have
a
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an
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 upward swing after a
centuary
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century
 as the population and
the
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technology
has
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have
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 advanced,
more
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and more
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 and more older generations experience and
enjoyed
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enjoy
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 the side of the developments.
Not to mention
, the healthcare services.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion
  • population aged 65 and over
  • trends
  • upward trend
  • significant increase
  • decrease
  • specific points in time
  • starting point
  • ending points
  • highest proportion
  • lowest proportion
  • given period
  • timeline
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