The diagram below shows how electricity is generated in a hydroelectric power station.

The diagram below shows how electricity is generated in a hydroelectric power station.
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The picture illustrates how
electricity
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is produced in a hydroelectric
power
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The
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station.
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, the
power
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station generates
electricity
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by taking in
water
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ne
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line
located in the high-level
reservoir
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at
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day
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the day
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, flowing through the generator producing
electricity
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that is
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distributed to the
power
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lines in the national grid,
while
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at night the
water
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from the low-level
reservoir
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moves up and the dam is closed.
Firstly
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, the
water
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from the river streams into the high-level
reservoir
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before passing through the open dam into the
power
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station. Here, the turbine controls the generator which generates
electricity
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.
Finally
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, the
electricity
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exits from the generator through the
power
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line where it is
then
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distributed to the national grid.
On the other hand
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,
water
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located at the low-level
reservoir
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is pushed upwards by the reversible turbine. As the
water
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travels upward,it passes through the dom which is closed to it
prevent
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to prevent
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intake from the river.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity, power, water, reservoir with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Reservoir
  • Penstock
  • Turbine
  • Generator
  • Transformer
  • High voltage
  • Renewable energy
  • Kinetic energy
  • Potential energy
  • Power grid
  • Sustainable
  • Flow rate
  • Energy conversion
  • Hydraulic pressure
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