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The chart below shows the numbers of male and female research students studying six science-related subjects at a UK university in 2009. summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the numbers of male and female research students studying six science-related subjects at a UK university in 2009. summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates the numbers of
men
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 and
women
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 research students learning six science-related
subjects
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 in
the
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 UK university in 2009.
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,
men
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 have a
more high
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higher
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 interest than
women
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 in science-related
subjects
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 except in one
subject
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. Physics's major was taken around 220 by
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 and only 48 by
women
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.
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,
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 major
become
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 the most big gap among other
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.
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,
major
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the major
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 of astronomy was learned by 150
men
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.
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, the
women
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 only took
this
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subjects
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 approximately 52.
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 to other
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,
men
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 who took geology as their major
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same
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the same
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 numbers
with
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as
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 astronomy. In
this
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 data,
male
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males
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 and
female
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females
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 have a similarity in biology's
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 which is the total numbers were high. Respectively,
men
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 and
women
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, 240 and 200.
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, only 40 students apart. The third
subject
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 that
men
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most
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apply
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take is medicine and
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became
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 the second rank
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subjects
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subject
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 for
women
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 who
took
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take
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apply
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this
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.
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Last
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The last
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subject
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, veterinary medicine
as
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is
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one
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the one
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 and only
subject
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which
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in which
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 the number of
female
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females
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 who studying
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this
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apply
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is higher than
men
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words men, women, subjects, subject with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "numbers of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "numbers of" was used 2 times.
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