The chart below shows the numbers of male and female research students studying six science-related subjects at a UK university in 2009. summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the numbers of male and female research students studying six science-related subjects at a UK university in 2009.

summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart illustrates the numbers of
men
and
women
research students learning six science-related
subjects
in
the
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UK university in 2009.
Overall
,
men
have a
more high
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higher
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interest than
women
in science-related
subjects
except in one
subject
. Physics's major was taken around 220 by
men
and only 48 by
women
.
Also
,
this
major
become
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becomes
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the most big gap among other
subjects
.
Besides
,
major
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the major
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of astronomy was learned by 150
men
.
On the other hand
, the
women
only took
this
subjects
approximately 52.
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to other
subjects
,
men
who took geology as their major
has
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had
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same
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the same
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numbers
with
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as
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astronomy. In
this
data,
male
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males
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and
female
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females
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have a similarity in biology's
subject
which is the total numbers were high. Respectively,
men
and
women
, 240 and 200.
In other words
, only 40 students apart. The third
subject
that
men
most
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apply
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take is medicine and
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became
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the second rank
subjects
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subject
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for
women
who
took
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take
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apply
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this
.
Last
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The last
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subject
, veterinary medicine
as
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is
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one
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the one
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and only
subject
which
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in which
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the number of
female
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females
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who studying
this
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apply
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is higher than
men
.
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