The maps below show the changes that have taken place at West Park Secondary School since its construction in 1950. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The maps below show the changes that have taken place at West Park Secondary School since its construction in 1950.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.
The maps illustrate the transformation of West Park Secondary School
since
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1950 until 2010. As we can see, the initial blueprint shows that a small building of
academy
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was surrounded by housing
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open space farmland and
playground
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a playground
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.
However
, after 30 years, many changes have
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which the houses have been removed and turned into car
park
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. Meanwhile, the school has been expanded
due to
the
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of
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population.
Not to mention
, the farmland has been modified into a sports field . Surprisingly,
recent
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development of the area in 2010 has
descrided
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described
a major conversion on the parking lot which
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been tripled
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the size to fit
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all the vehicles from the parents and the employed. As for the institution, nothing has been done but the sports field and the playground have been reduced in size.
Overall
, considering
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the
increase
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number of people in
such
place
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places
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have upgraded many
infrastucture
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infrastructure
in a good way to make a better standard
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of living
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to
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the communities.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • transformation
  • conversion
  • development
  • replace
  • initially
  • originally
  • expansion
  • reduction
  • infrastructure
  • modify
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