The pie chart illustrates the pivotal ground that negatively affects the productivity of agricultural land while the table shows information about the proportion of land degradation due to those effects categorized in three separate areas of the world within the 1990s period.

The pie chart illustrates the pivotal ground that negatively affects the productivity of agricultural land while the table shows information about the proportion of land degradation due to those effects categorized in three separate areas of the world within the 1990s period.
The pie chart
depict
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the pivotal ground that negatively affects the productivity of agricultural
land
while
the table
provide
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data about the proportion of
land
degradation
due to
those effects categorized in three separate areas of the world during the 1990 years
Overall
it is clear that
the highest percentage of
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compared with the lowest figures of other
duing
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during
1990 . At
bigen
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begin
with, the causes of
worldwild
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world
land
degradation
the
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grazing were increased number by approximately 35%
percantge .
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per cent while
while
deforestation nearly less than
third
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.
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whereas
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other very small number
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. On
one
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hand, the
over
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culitvation
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cultivation
highest productive of agricultural
land
in 1990 . In
conclusion
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the
over grazing
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area rose one competitively in
this
areas .
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 81%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words land with synonyms.
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