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The chart below shows the results survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

The chart below shows the results survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.
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The given diagram describes the consumers’ drinking and buying caffeine beverages pattern in five cities in Australia, in three categories:
coffee
 shops
visiting
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, buying instant
coffee
 and buying fresh
coffee
 in
last
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the last
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 4 weeks.
Overall
, most people prefer to go to a café for
coffee
 or tea,
while
 buying fresh
coffee
 is the least popular option.
Moreover
, residents from
Melbourne
 account for the highest proportion in all three categories. In terms of visiting a
coffee
 shop for a caffeinated drink, a majority of
citizen
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citizens
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 from
Melbourne
, Sydney and Hobart enjoy the activity, recording approximately 62%, followed by Brisbane with slightly above 55%.
Lastly
, residents from Adelaide visited a café in
last
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the last
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 4 weeks the least, with less than 50% recorded. Moving to
buying
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buy
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 instant
coffee
, the figures for Hobart, Adelaide and Brisbane were almost 60%, around 52% and exactly 50% respectively. Meanwhile, less than 50% of consumers from
Melbourne
 and Sydney purchased
such
product
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products
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.
Finally
, fresh
coffee
 was only bought by 40 to 45% of the population from Sydney and
Melbourne
,
while
 that of Hobart was approximately 37%.
In addition
, below 35% was the percentage of residents in Brisbane and Adelaide
chose
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who chose
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 to purchase fresh
coffee
 in
last
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the last
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 4 weeks.
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