The chart below shows the results survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

The chart below shows the results survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.
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The given diagram describes the consumers’ drinking and buying caffeine beverages pattern in five cities in Australia, in three categories:
coffee
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shops
visiting
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apply
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, buying instant
coffee
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and buying fresh
coffee
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in
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last
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the last
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4 weeks.
Overall
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, most people prefer to go to a café for
coffee
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or tea,
while
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buying fresh
coffee
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is the least popular option.
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, residents from
Melbourne
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account for the highest proportion in all three categories. In terms of visiting a
coffee
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shop for a caffeinated drink, a majority of
citizen
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citizens
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from
Melbourne
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, Sydney and Hobart enjoy the activity, recording approximately 62%, followed by Brisbane with slightly above 55%.
Lastly
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, residents from Adelaide visited a café in
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last
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the last
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4 weeks the least, with less than 50% recorded. Moving to
buying
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buy
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instant
coffee
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, the figures for Hobart, Adelaide and Brisbane were almost 60%, around 52% and exactly 50% respectively. Meanwhile, less than 50% of consumers from
Melbourne
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and Sydney purchased
such
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product
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products
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.
Finally
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, fresh
coffee
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was only bought by 40 to 45% of the population from Sydney and
Melbourne
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,
while
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that of Hobart was approximately 37%.
In addition
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, below 35% was the percentage of residents in Brisbane and Adelaide
chose
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who chose
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to purchase fresh
coffee
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in
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last
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the last
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4 weeks.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last, while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, melbourne with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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