The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks like now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.

The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks like now.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.
The diagram illustrates the floor plan of
central
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the central
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library 20 years ago and
how
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what
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it looks like today.
Overall
, every location of rooms and
furnitures
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furniture
types of furniture
pieces of furniture
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was changed. Tables and chairs were removed from the
center
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centre
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of the library and a new cafe was built. The
room
where people can watch videos and use computers was moved to the under-left corner
room
.
At
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the space where
computer
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the computer
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room
was located in the past,
the
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a
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room
for children's
fictions
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fiction
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books
and storytelling events was made.
In addition
, there are two sofas in
this
room
.
Up-right
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The up-right
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corner
room
is the lecture
room
and when you go out of
here
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there
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, there is an adult fiction
books
corner,
information
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desk and self-service machines.
Lastly
,
at
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on
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the under-right side, there was an enquiry desk but now
cafe
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the cafe
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came
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has come
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in and
citzens
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citizens
can see all
reference
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the reference
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books
at
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in
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the space where adult fiction
books
were located
before
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apply
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.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words room, books with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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