The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks like now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.
The diagram illustrates the floor plan of
central
library 20 years ago and Add an article
the central
how
it looks like today.
Correct word choice
what
Overall
, every location of rooms and furnitures
was changed. Tables and chairs were removed from the Change the wording
furniture
types of furniture
pieces of furniture
items of furniture
center
of the library and a new cafe was built.
The Change the spelling
centre
room
where people can watch videos and use computers was moved to the under-left corner room
. At
the space where Change preposition
In
computer
Correct article usage
the computer
room
was located in the past, the
Correct article usage
a
room
for children's fictions
Change the noun form
fiction
books
and storytelling events was made. In addition
, there are two sofas in this
room
. Up-right
corner Add an article
The up-right
room
is the lecture room
and when you go out of here
, there is an adult fiction Correct your spelling
there
books
corner, information
desk and self-service machines. Correct article usage
an information
Lastly
, at
the under-right side, there was an enquiry desk but now Change preposition
on
cafe
Correct article usage
the cafe
came
in and Wrong verb form
has come
citzens
can see all Correct your spelling
citizens
reference
Correct article usage
the reference
books
at
the space where adult fiction Change preposition
in
books
were located before
.Rephrase
apply
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words room, books with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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