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The graph below shows the pollution levels in London between 1600 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the pollution levels in London between 1600 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graphic presents the worsening of air quality in the period of 400 years between the years 1600 and 2000 in the city of London. It measures pollutants in the air in micrograms per cubic
metrer
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meter
metre
metres
.
Overall
, It can be
obeserved
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observed
 that both the sulphur dioxide and smoke pollutants have a similar curve throughout the timeline.
Suplhur
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Sulphur
 dioxide is the most prominent toxic pollutant in the air and the smoke is
considerable
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 less
prevelant
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prevalent
 in the atmosphere. Looking at sulphur dioxide, its contamination in
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 1500s stood at approximately 10 micrograms. Over the next 100
years
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 its
level
 continued to increase, reaching the
level
 of 750. In 1750, its
level
 dropped slightly around 700,
then
 it again gained some momentum, roses
steadly
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steadily
steady
 up to 800 in
1800s
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. from the
begining
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beginning
 of
1900s
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the 1900s
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, a considerable
fluctutaion
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fluctuation
 is recorded in
it's
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level
,
dopping
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dropping
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 significantly from nearly 500 to almost 0 in
late
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the late
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 1990s. Comparing the smoke, its
level
steadly
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steadily
 grew from
1600s
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the 1600s
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 to 1850 from a mere 10 to almost 300. But with
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begining
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beginning
 of
2000s
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the 2000s
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, both levels of
pullutants
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pollutants
 started to drop
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at an
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an
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a
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 faster rate,
declied
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declined
 to 0 in the end.
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