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In many countries it is common for families to own and run their own business. Some people think this is the best way to run a business, while others considered this a potential source of problems. Discuss both sides and Give your opinion.

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Introduction
It
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It is
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 common in many countries
sharing
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that sharing
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the
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their
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 own
buusiness
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business
 with
families
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 is the best way to run a
business
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while
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another
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other
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 people
considered
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consider
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this
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 a source of potential problems .In my
opinion
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opinion,
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 it is a good run
in
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apply
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a
busuness
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business
 to start
withe
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with
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suport
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support
.
Body paragraph 1
in my
lecture
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lecture,
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 many
families
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 share a
business
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togather
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together
 in most of them are big
family
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families
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.For
exampel
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example
 the
avn mall
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AVN Mall
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 is own the
alsaya
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Alsaya
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famaily
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family
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this
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which
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make
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makes
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mach
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many
 of
sacsas
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the sacsas
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 in
kuwaiti
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Kuwaiti
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.If the family have a
stroing
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strong
 bound
togather
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together
to gather
 the
business
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wil
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will
 work .the family
woh
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who
contan
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contain
content
mach
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each
 person will have a
grat
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great
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business
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 of
numbur
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number
 of people work in it.
i
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I
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beleve
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believe
 that a strong family
no
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has no
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 way to have problems and they
well
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will
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 have
a
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an
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incredibly
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incredible
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business
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.
ween
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when
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i
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I
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 see family
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business
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businesses
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i
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I
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 feel
happay
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happy
 to help them and sport them. many
of
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apply
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people support the family
business
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.In my point of
view
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view,
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 the
famaily
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family
businass
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business
 is successful . and in the
work
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work,
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every one
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everyone
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 should be responsible
to allow
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for allowing
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 the
business
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 to
success
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succeed
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.
Body paragraph 2
in
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On
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the onother
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onother
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another
other
hand
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hand,
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 some
family
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families
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 have
a
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apply
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pig
broblems
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problems
problem
because
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because of
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 the money.
Body paragraph 3
many
families
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loss
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lose
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 each other because the
incom
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income
 and become more
salfish
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selfish
sailfish
 and
didnot
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did not
didn't
thing
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think
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on
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about
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enother
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other
. My uncle
made
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started
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 a
busuness
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business
 with her sister and she considered a lot of problems about the responsibility and the time of working and
thid afect
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that affects
 the family in a huge way.
for
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For
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the
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that
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 save said in case you didnot have
this
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 understanding
withe
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with
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 your family dont do the buusiness.
Conclusion
finaly
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Finally
 in my opinion
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family
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families
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families,
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businass
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business
 is a
graet
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great
 thing and will
successful
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be successful
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.

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coherence cohesion
Use linking words and phrases to help guide the reader through your arguments. Words like 'Furthermore,' 'However,' and 'On the other hand' can improve the flow of your essay.
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coherence cohesion
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You have presented both sides of the argument, which shows a balanced approach to the task.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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