The charts below show that percentage of their daily intake of various nutrients the average person in the USA consumes in each meal and in snacks. These nutrients may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarie the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show that percentage of their daily intake of various nutrients the average person in the USA consumes in each meal and in snacks. These nutrients  may be unhealthy if eaten too much.

Summarie the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The graphs illustrate the proportion of four daily meals ( breakfast, lunch,
dinner
, and snacks)
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include
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nutriernts
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nutrients
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individual in the USA
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, and it
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might be unhealthy for them.
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,
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most
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sodium
and saturated fat
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to breakfast and lunch,
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most
of
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the
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people add sugar
in
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their snacks. There is
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high
propotion
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proportion
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a
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half of the
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to
dinner
and only a third
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saturated fat
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to their
dinner
.
However
, they only add sugar to their
dinner
by almost a quarter.
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, in the USA lunch
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the second highest fraction with almost
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of
sodium
and
by
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just over
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of saturated fat, and only under 20% of it
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sugars.
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, snacks
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the majority of sugar fraction, and with
minority
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a minority
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of
sodium
and saturated fat.
moreover
, breakfast has similar proportions around 15% in all of the nutrients.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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