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The diagrams below shows the water supply system in Australia at the present and in future. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features.

The diagrams below shows the water supply system in Australia at the present and in future. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features.
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The two diagrams provide us with the
water
 supply system in Australia now and in the future. There are three different kinds of
water
 in
this
 system including pure
water
,
storm
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stormwater
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water
, and
waste
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wastewater
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water
. In the present day, pure
water
 flows from storage into human facilities
such
 as households, shops, cities and factories. After that, pure
water
 is used for daily life and becomes two types of
water
,
storm
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stormwater
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water
 and
waste
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wastewater
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water
, The first one
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is releases
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releases
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released
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 into the river, and the latter
moves
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move
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 to the
water
 treatment plant.
Finally
, the
waste
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wastewater
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water
, which is used for treatment, continuously
go
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goes
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 to the river like
storm
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stormwater
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water
. In the future, there is going to
keep
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be
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 the same process for pure
water
, flowing from the dam into facilities.
However
, the others will be changed.
Firstly
, not only
waste
water
 is going to move to the
water
 treatment plant but
storm
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stormwater
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water
 will
also
 be changed to release into the same destination.
Furthermore
, these types of
water
 will not be allowed into the river. These waters will
be transform
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be transformed
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 through the process and become pure
water
, giving back to the human.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, storm, waste with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "moves" was used 2 times.
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