In many countries people are now living longer than ever before. Some people say an ageing population creates problems for governmemts. Other people think there are benefits if society has more elderly people. To what extent do the advantages of having an ageing population outweigh the disadvantages
Some countries have many elderly
people
, some people
think that will be an issue for governments. While
others think that will be benefits when the country
has many old people
. In this
essay, I will discuss the advantages and disadvantages of having an ageing population
in the country
.
On the one hand, there are many advantages of having apply
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to apply
elderly
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to elderly
people
. First of all, the nation will have more experience in a lot of things, such
as sports, art and marketing. For example
, in Kuwait we have a lot of football players in the past we took the
instruction from them, like Bader Almotawaa. Correct article usage
apply
Moreover
, when the governments have many old people
, the country
will have more jobs for the eldest people
. It is also
important to highlight that, if we have elderly the education will be better,
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apply
because
their experience.
Add the preposition
because of
On the other hand
, there are some bad effects when the country
has an ageing population
. One of the bad effects,
is there will be more traffic in the city. Remove the comma
apply
For example
, China has many elderly people
, but the China government handle with
the ageing Change preposition
apply
population
. Moreover
, they will cause health problems. For instance
, high blood pressure and sometimes obesity. Furthermore
, when the elderly feel lonely and sad that could be a disaster for the country
.
To sum up
, it is clear that
the ageing population
have advantages and disadvantages for the
governments and Correct article usage
apply
apply
nations. I believe that the old Wrong verb form
applied
people
always have good effects on the country
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