In many countries people are now living longer than ever before. Some people say an ageing population creates problems for governmemts. Other people think there are benefits if society has more elderly people. To what extent do the advantages of having an ageing population outweigh the disadvantages

Some countries have many elderly
people
, some
people
think that will be an issue for governments.
While
others think that will be benefits when the
country
has many old
people
. In
this
essay, I will discuss the advantages and disadvantages of having an ageing
population
in the
country
. On the one hand, there are many advantages of having
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elderly
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people
. First of all, the nation will have more experience in a lot of things,
such
as sports, art and marketing.
For example
, in Kuwait we have a lot of football players in the past we took
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instruction from them, like Bader Almotawaa.
Moreover
, when the governments have many old
people
, the
country
will have more jobs for the eldest
people
. It is
also
important to highlight that, if we have elderly the education will be better
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their experience.
On the other hand
, there are some bad effects when the
country
has an ageing
population
. One of the bad effects
,
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is there will be more traffic in the city.
For example
, China has many elderly
people
, but the China government handle
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the ageing
population
.
Moreover
, they will cause health problems.
For instance
, high blood pressure and sometimes obesity.
Furthermore
, when the elderly feel lonely and sad that could be a disaster for the
country
.
To sum up
,
it is clear that
the ageing
population
have advantages and disadvantages for
the
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governments and
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nations. I believe that the old
people
always have good effects on the
country
.
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