IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 6.5

The diagram shows the components of a neuron and how it works Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
This
Linking Words
 diagram shows the parts of the neuron and the way they work to deliver
electrical
Add an article
an electrical
show examples
 signal , it's clear from the diagram that,
electrical
Add an article
the electrical
an electrical
show examples
 signal received by
dendrites
Use synonyms
 of the neuron, moves to the other
adjucent
Correct your spelling
adjacent
 neuron through terminal buttons
at the end
Linking Words
 of the
axon
Use synonyms
, According
what
Change preposition
to what
show examples
 is shown,
Use synonyms
cell
Correct article usage
the cell
show examples
 body (soma)
receive
Correct subject-verb agreement
receives
show examples
 messages from other cells through
dendrites
Use synonyms
 ,
Linking Words
then
Correct word choice
and then
show examples
 the
informations
Change the wording
information
pieces of information
show examples
 carried by
Use synonyms
axon
Correct article usage
the axon
show examples
 to terminal buttons.
Axon
Use synonyms
it
Correct pronoun usage
itself
show examples
 self covered by
Correct article usage
a myeline
show examples
myeline
Correct your spelling
myelin
show examples
 sheath which is cover
help
Correct subject-verb agreement
helps
show examples
 to speed neural impulses.
At the end
Linking Words
 of the
axon
Use synonyms
,
terminal
Correct article usage
the terminal
show examples
 button
raises
Verb problem
apply
show examples
, which
connected
Add a missing verb
is connected
show examples
 to
Use synonyms
dendrites
Correct article usage
the dendrites
show examples
 of the other neuronal
cell
Use synonyms
, and
its
Correct your spelling
is
show examples
 responsible
to send
Change preposition
for sending
show examples
 the information to the next neuronal
cell
Use synonyms
.
To sum up
Linking Words
 we could say that the normal path of the action potential that carries electrical signal is
satrt
Correct your spelling
set
 from the
dendrities
Correct your spelling
dendrites
 of the
cell
Use synonyms
 body to the terminal buttons, and from there to
dendrites
Use synonyms
 again in order to send the information.

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "at the end".
▼
Vocabulary: Replace the words dendrites, axon, cell with synonyms.
▼
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
▼
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "diagram" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "informations" was used 3 times.
▼
What to do next:
Look at other essays: