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The chart below gives information on agricultural exports from the United States in 2019 and 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information on agricultural exports from the United States in 2019 and 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart below reveals sales in
billion
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 dollars for
beef
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,
pork
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,
corn
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 and
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soybeans
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soybean
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 products shipped from America in 2019 and 2020.
Overall
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, exports for all agro-products rose in a
year
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 , WITH
soybeans
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 increasing significantly and
beef
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 slightly. In the same way,
pork
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 and
corn
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 experienced
INSUBSTANSIAL
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an INSUBSTANSIAL
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 uptick. In 2019
soybeans
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 were traded at
approximateLY
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approximately
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a aCCumulative
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aCCumulative
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apply
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18 $
billion
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 across THE USA and reached
its
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their
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 peak at A staggering $25
billion
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 the next
year
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.
In contrast
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,
beef
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 was sold the least out of all commodities . In a
year
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 sales increased by around $1
billion
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, accounting for $7
billion
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AT the end
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 of the period, which remains the smallest figure in THE graph. It is worth pointing out that the
figureS
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figures
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 for the farm products
except
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except for
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soybeans
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 in 2019 were somewhat THE same
to
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as
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 the
the
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apply
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subsequent
year
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of
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apply
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another
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apply
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. To
iLLustrate
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illustrate
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, sales for
pork
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 in 2019
stands
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stand
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 at the same point as trades for
beef
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 in 2020.
Similiar
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A similar
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 applies to the revenue of
pork
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 after a
year
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 and THE initial bottom line of
corn
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, which made up to approximately $7
billion
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.
Corn
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 has
prolifErated
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proliferated
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 since, amounting to $9
billion
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.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words billion, beef, pork, corn, soybeans, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • agricultural exports
  • trend analysis
  • export values
  • significant growth or decline
  • leading agricultural products
  • market demand
  • weather conditions
  • international trade policies
  • summarize
  • potential reasons
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