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The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given line chart illustrates the fluctuations in the average
price
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 of copper,
nickel
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 and zinc every
month
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 in the year 2014.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 all minerals have
price
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 fluctuations during the year, and
nickel
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 is the most drastic downfall of
price
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change
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 among the others. Having looked at the provided line graph for more details, we can see that in the first
month
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 of the year 2014, the
proportion
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change
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 in
Nickel
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price
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 began at 6% before dropping to 4% in February.
Then
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, it went down significantly to 1% in March. It fluctuated at
this
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 percentage for about 2 months and decreased substantially to the lowest of -3% in June. In July,the
proportion
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change
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 in
nickel
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price
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 increased to -1% and remained stable at
this
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 percentage until September,
then
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 it fell slightly to -2% in October and climbed sharply to 1% in November. In December, it remained at
this
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proportion
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.
In addition
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, Zinc, which started at 1% in January,
then
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 climbed to 3% in the next
month
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 and decreased sharply to -1% in June.
Moreover
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, it fluctuated at
this
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 level in the next 4 months and
then
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 increased significantly to 2% in December.
Last
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 but not least, the trend of Copper was similar to Zinc but it had a lower percentage
change
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 in
price
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. Beginning from 2% in the first
month
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 and
then
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 keeping the lowest
proportion
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 until June. In the next 5, it fluctuated at around 1% and increased to 1.5% in December.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words price, nickel, month, change, proportion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "climbed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuations" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuate
  • volatile
  • stability
  • peak
  • trough
  • increment
  • decrement
  • steady
  • gradual
  • sharp
  • increase
  • decrease
  • month-on-month
  • average monthly change
  • commodity
  • benchmark
  • trend
  • precipitous
  • plateau
  • significant
  • marginal
  • surge
  • dip
  • plummet
  • soar
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