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The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates how families in certain
nation
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nations
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 spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. There are
total
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a total
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8
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of 8
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spending categories :
food
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, housing, fuel and power, clothing and
footware
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footwear
, household goods, personal goods, transport and leisure.
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, in 1968 the amount of invested
for
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in
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food
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 was the highest
one
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, recorded
35
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at 35
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%.
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, after 50 years people used their income
to
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for
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 leisure part most. In both years,
fuel
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the fuel
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 and power category is the lowest
one
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. And the distribution of 1968 was heavily focused on
one
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categoty
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category
 but it
distributed
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was distributed
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 more evenly in 2018. In 1968, people used most of the money
into
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on
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food
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 and spent
secondly
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for
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on
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 housing, clothing and
footware
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footwear
. The percentage gap between the top
one
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 and the next
one
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 is 25%, which is big.
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, the proportion of leisure in 2018 was around 23% which is the highest and spending for housing and
food
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 followed orderly, both figures are between 15% and 20%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words food, one with synonyms.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • compare
  • spending patterns
  • allocated
  • weekly income
  • significant changes
  • essential items
  • food
  • housing
  • clothing
  • leisure
  • communication
  • increase
  • decrease
  • twofold rise
  • substantial increase
  • quadrupling
  • declined
  • food and drink
  • slight increase
  • prioritizing
  • necessities
  • transitioned
  • portio
  • non-essential items
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