Some people believe that schoolchildren should do their class work individually. Other people believe that sometimes class work should be done in small groups. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

In today’s society, it is an increasingly popular topic to discuss whether
school children
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should complete their
class
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classwork
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work
individually or do it in small
groups
. Personally, I agree to a certain extent that
schoolchildren
should do their
classwork
individually,
however
, I feel that there are drawbacks to
this
which I will elaborate on
further
in
this
essay.
Firstly
,
schoolchildren
should complete their class
work
individually as they can concentrate on their own tasks which enables them to
work
productively.
For example
, if
schoolchildren
are able to
work
individually, there will be
less
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distractions
such
as their peers talking to them. It is likely that they could be more
focussed
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when completing their own tasks, resulting in a faster pace of
working
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, and
also
working more efficiently without the disturbance of their peers.
However
,
one
can argue that
this
might be detrimental to the development of
schoolchildren
as they might be limited from communicating with their peers through small
groups
. So, restricting the development of their communication skills.
Therefore
,
although
we can argue that it could deteriorate the communication skills of
schoolchildren
,
one
can advocate that it will potentially lead to higher productivity when completing
classwork
.
Furthermore
,
one
can assert that they should finish their
classwork
individually because
this
helps develop
self reliance
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and practise their ability to solve problems on their own.
For instance
, when they come across a question they don’t know, they can think about it themselves
instead
of asking for help and relying on others.
Thus
, by working on class
work
themselves, it is beneficial to them as they could develop important
problem solving
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skills.
On the other hand
,
one
can refute the idea that they should
work
individually.
Instead
, they should
work
in small
groups
as through working in
groups
.
This
is because
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group discussions, they could share their ideas.
This
would allow them to respect their peer’s perspectives.
As a result
, they should
work
in
groups
.
Nevertheless
,
one
can dismiss that it restricts them from learning basic manners,
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can agree that there are positive impacts
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personal development. In conclusion, there are advantages and disadvantages of completing school
work
individually. I think that working individually to complete
classwork
would be a better choice than working in small
groups
as the benefits outweigh the drawbacks.
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Your introduction clearly states your position and outlines the points you will discuss.
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