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The chart below gives information about the growth of urban population in certain parts of the world including the prediction of the future. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information about the growth of urban population in certain parts of the world including the prediction of the future. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart demonstrates the
raising
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rising
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 proportion of the people living in cities and towns across the globe and
also
 in Africa, Asia and
Latin
America
 from past to present and
also
 includes the
future
 forecast.
Overall
,
it is clear that
 urbanisation
was
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increased in the listed regions throughout the period and
in addition
 it was estimated to show an upward trend in
future
. In the year 1950,
Latin
America
 was reported with
highest
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the highest
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 urban
population
 among all the areas with about 40%
whereas
 the entire world's city
population
 was 10% less
tan
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than
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 that in
Latin
America
. After
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the silver
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silver jubilee
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Silver Jubilee
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 period, every region was urbanised.
However
,
Latin
America
, when compared to the entire world whose half of the
population
 preferred urban areas, was ahead with about 70% of its citizens residing in towns and cities
. .
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.
...
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This
 upward trend was predicted to continue even in the
future
 and by 2030 about 80% of the
Latin
America
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American
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 nationalities would live in urban areas.
In addition
, only one-third of the whole world's urban
population
 was seen
in
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 both
the
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continents for the year 1950.
However
, it was augmented during the term and by 2000, their proportion was maximised by four times.
Furthermore
, in the
future
,
Asian
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the Asian
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 city
population
was
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is
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 estimated to be above 50%
whereas
 half of the African
population
was
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is
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 forecasted to live in urban
region
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regions
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words latin, america, future, population with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • urban population
  • future predictions
  • historical data
  • urbanization trends
  • rates of growth
  • developed countries
  • developing countries
  • economic development
  • migration
  • government policies
  • upward trend
  • pace of urbanization
  • catching up
  • comparative analysis
  • regional differences
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