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The graph below shows the quantities of goods transported in the UK between 1974 and 2002 by four different modes of transport.

The graph below shows the quantities of goods transported in the UK between 1974 and 2002 by four different modes of transport.
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The line graph provides
the
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data
from
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 the amount of products transported in the UK changed over the 26-year period.
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, most amount of products transported increased over the given period, with the exception of rail. Looking at the line graph more closely, one can see that the amount of goods on the road rose gradually by nearly 30
million
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tonnes
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 from approximately 70
million
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tonnes
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 in 1974 to almost 100
million
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tonnes
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 in 2002.
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, quantities of goods in the water went up slightly from 1974 to 1985 and
have
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 not
fluctuated
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 slightly from 1985 to 1998 and soared from 50
million
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tonnes
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 in 1998 to 60
million
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 in 2002.
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, quantities of objects in rail have experienced fluctuation over the given period. In conclusion, all objects transported went up and down for several years.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words million, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "went up" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Transported goods
  • Quantities
  • Trends
  • Modes of transport
  • Rail
  • Road
  • Water
  • Pipeline
  • Fluctuations
  • Predominance
  • Economic influences
  • Societal changes
  • Technological advancements
  • Environmental impact
  • Growth
  • Steady increase/decrease
  • Comparison
  • Period (e.g., decade, years)
  • Examination
  • Implications
  • Analysis
  • Conclusion
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