The graph below shows relative price changes for fresh fruits and vegetables, sugars and sweets, and carbonated drinks between 1978 and 2009.

The graph below shows relative price changes for fresh fruits and vegetables, sugars and sweets, and carbonated drinks between 1978 and 2009.
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The line graph illustrates the variation in the cost of three commodities(Sugar and Sweets, Carbonated
drinks
and Fresh fruits and vegetables) over the
period
of 31 years, from 1978 to 2009.
Additionally
, the changes
consumer-price
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index
are
also
presented which shows
correlation
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with the mentioned products.
Overall
,
it is clear that
the consumer-price
index
has steadily inflated throughout the
period
. Fruits and vegetables saw the highest rate of fluctuations,
while
the remaining two commodities remained steady rose gradually, and stayed lower than the consumer price
index
for each
period
. In 1979, the
prices
of all the products experienced a 50% surge in
prices
,
then
between 1981 and 1983, the cost of sweets and
drinks
increased slightly(above 100% and nearly 80% respectively). The percentage change in
prices
for fresh fruits and vegetables was recorded at 90% in 1985, the price
further
fluctuated to nearly 170% after which it continued to increase dramatically, reaching its maximum in 2008 at around 340%.
In contrast
, the
prices
for sugar and soft
drinks
remained relatively lower than the
consumer-price
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index
for the given
period
. From 1979 up to 1985, the fluctuation remained constant for each of them. By the end of 1985, the
prices
for both rose, with sugar increasing considerably
while
soft
drinks
increased steadily.
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