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The table below shows how the UK unemployed spent their time last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words. How the Unemployed Spend their Time, UK, last year

The table below shows how the UK unemployed spent their time last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words. How the Unemployed Spend their Time, UK, last year
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The table shows how the Unemployed spent their time
last
 year in The UK. In an overview majority of the women were doing
house
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housework
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 working the mornings ,
where as
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whereas
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 the males
where
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were
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 almost equally involved in job hunting and shopping in the mornings . The major activity for
females
 remained as
house work
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housework
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 even in the afternoons where
as
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majority
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the majority
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 of the males were watching
Tv
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TV
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 and doing gardening . The least popular activity in the morning was drinking for both males and
females
 . The percentage of Unemployed
females
 involved in drinking remained
as
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at
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 1 in the morning and in the evening ,
whereas
 it increased from 2 to 3% in the evening for men No
females
 preferred to stay in bed or to play in the evening where
as
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whereas
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 4% of men were playing in the evening and one
percentage
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per cent
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 stayed
on
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in
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the
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apply
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bed even in the afternoons .Visiting friends and shopping were
also
 popular among
females
 in the evenings
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 88%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words females with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stay" was used 2 times.
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