The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework and households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework and households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The charts illustrate the interchange in ownership of electrical gadgets
being
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washing
machine
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machines
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,
refrigerator
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refrigerators
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and a
vacuum
cleaner and
length
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the length
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of time used performing house jobs and households in a single nation in the years from 1920 to 2019. All three electrical appliances began in 1920  with a rise and continued steadily up until the end with a constant
percentage
.
Washing
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The washing
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machine
was the highest from the start and ended up being at the bottom. 
Refrigerator
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The refrigerator
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began by being the least and ended
being
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up being
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at the top
together with
the
vacuum
cleaner. Hours from the start were high and decreased till the end.  In 1920 all household gadgets had an increase from the start, with the
refrigerator
began
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at 0%,
vacuum
cleaner was second
with
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at
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30% and the highest was the washing
machine
at 40%.
While
they all continue to rise in
percentage
, the washing
machine
had a slight drop in 1980
where
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when
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it had a
percentage
of almost 62.  It picked up till tear 2019 where it
finally
ended at around 72%. The
refrigerator
and
vacuum
cleaner ended up being
ties
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with a constant
percentage
of 100% till the end of 2019.  The hours used per week were 50 in 1920 and continued to fall till 1980
where
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when
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they were about 15.  They
remain
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remained
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constant till 2000 and
finally
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finally,
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in 2019 they slightly dropped again to 10 hours per week.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "finally".
Vocabulary: Replace the words machine, refrigerator, vacuum, percentage with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership of electrical appliances
  • steadily increased
  • dramatically decreased
  • correlating the rise
  • became common
  • households
  • prevalence
  • technological advancements
  • increased affordability
  • household chores
  • labor-saving devices
  • allocated for housework
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