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Write about the following topic: Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write atleast 250 words.

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Living in a
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 where you have to speak a foreign
language
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 can indeed cause both social
problems
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 and practical
problems
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.
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, the extent to which these issues affect an individual can vary greatly depending on various factors. The social
issues
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 would be
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languages
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 barrier, which means that a
person
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 coming from
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a different
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country
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 might not be able to speak and get the
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 which might be a problem as far as
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 who
live
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 in a
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. Another problem is linked to the
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 barrier, but it
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behavior
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the behavior
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 of people. An individual who
come
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 to the
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 might offend people with their
behavior
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 or
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. For
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, some cultures like Vietnamese people like to be very polite and say things
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 from
another
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other countries
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country
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 a
person
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 who doesn't know how to behave in a particular might offend others around
individual
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. The practical
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problems
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 would be misunderstanding of cultures. That means a
person
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show
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visit
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other
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country
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 doesn't understand the
cultures
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culture
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. The
seconds
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 practical
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problems
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 is getting a job.
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coherence and cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph contains a single clear main idea and use linking words to make transitions between ideas smoother.
task achievement
The essay addresses both social and practical problems caused by living in a country where a foreign language is spoken, which shows a good understanding of the task.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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