The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site.

The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site.
The two maps highlight an
idustrial
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industrial
sector in the town of Norbiton present today and
it's
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its
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forcated
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forced
development .
Overall
, it can be seen that the industrial sector of Norbiton will be updated including more houses and buildings.
To begin
with , to the north of the
river
, currently there is farmland which will be replaced by a housing society. Maps
also
show that a new road across the
river
will be constructed for people. To the south of the
river
, there is a chain of factories in future it will be replaced by houses.
Furthermore
, factories in the west of the stream will be replaced by shops . A medical centre and playing area for children will be established to the south of the
river
.
Additionally
, a factory on the south-east side of the
river
would replaced by a teaching centre.Farmland will be constructed to the southeast of the estuary.
Finally
, the street will split into three ways to provide facilities for peo
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • industrial area
  • development
  • infrastructure
  • manufacturing
  • facilities
  • transition
  • planning
  • commercial
  • residential
  • renovation
  • urban planning
  • sustainability
  • environmental impact
  • local economy
  • rejuvenation
  • construction
  • modernization
  • accessibility
  • demolition
  • gentrification
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