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The table below presents the results of surveys in 2000, 2005 and 2010 avout one university. Summarise the information and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below presents the results of surveys in 2000, 2005 and 2010 avout one university. Summarise the information and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The table below
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displays
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 number of students who got good grades for different aspects between 2000 and 2010 with an interval of 5 years. As we can see, in 2000,
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 of learners showed great results in
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resources
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 and building/teaching
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 with
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 percentage of 87 and 77.
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, students showed pretty bad
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 in the aspects of technical
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, electronic
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 and most importantly,
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range
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the range
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 of modules offered with the corresponding
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rates
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 of 65, 45 and a whopping 32. As the time passed, in 2005, many subjects' ratings didn't change that much. Technical
quality
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 and
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 of modules offered got slightly lower by 2%,
print
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resources
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, being the highest one, got
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a minor
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 increase
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 by 2%,
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 building/teaching
facilities
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 grades stayed the same. All of them, except for one.
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The aspect
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 of electronic
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' results skyrocketed by 27%.
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, after another 5 years,
print
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resources
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 and electronic
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 showed amazing rates of 88%. Building/teaching
facilities
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 surprisingly stayed with the same score of 77%. Technical
quality
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also
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 slightly increased by 6%. And the lowest out of all was
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range
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a range
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 of modules offered with 27%.
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, in a decade,
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the aspect
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 of building/teaching
facilities
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 was consistently staying at 77%.
Print
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resources
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was
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 still the highest one out of all, tieing with electronic
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.
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 technical
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 and
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 of models offered didn't illustrate impressive results with
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 percentage of 69 and 27.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, however".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words print, resources, facilities, quality, range with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • survey results
  • teaching quality
  • facilities
  • student satisfaction
  • support services
  • trends
  • ratings
  • infrastructure
  • utilization rates
  • feedback
  • university policies
  • available services
  • evolution
  • main features
  • comparisons
  • relevant
  • analyzing
  • overview
  • discussing
  • exploring
  • examining
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