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The diagrams show the structure of solar panel and its use.

The diagrams show the structure of solar panel and its use.
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The given diagrams represent the structure and mechanism of sun-driven energy named a solar
panel
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.
Overall
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, the Solar
panel
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 consists of three main parts: a rectangular
box
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,
a
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an
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 inlet-outlet
chanels
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channel
, and a
water
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 pipe.
However
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, it is interesting to note
this
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 solar
panel
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 either
opt
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opts
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 for
air
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 or
water
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 as a medium for converting energy from the sun. Starting with the
appearances
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appearance
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, a single
panel
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composed
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is composed
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with
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of
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 a rectangular
box
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 with
transparent
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a transparent
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 top. An inlet
chanel
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channel
 and outlet
chanel
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channel
is
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are
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 located at the opposite end for
heated
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the heated
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 version.
Similarly
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, for
heated
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the heated
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water
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 version, the black coated
water
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 pipe that
coiled
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coils
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 inside the
box
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connect
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connects
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 both
inlet
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the inlet
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 and outlet at both
end
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ends
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. In regards
with
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to
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 how
its
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it
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work
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works
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, the solar
panel
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using
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uses
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 the heat energy from the sun that
generated
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is generated
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 from heated
air
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 and
water
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. The transparent top of the
box
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allow
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allows
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 sunlight to
expose
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be exposed
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 to the inner compound in the
box
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. The cool
air
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 and
water
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 that
sending
Wrong verb form
is sent
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 inside the
box
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 get
heat
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heated
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 up from the sun leaving the warm
air
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 or
water
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 out
at the end
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 80%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words panel, box, water, air with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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