The charts below show the average temperatures in 12 months in three cities and how many hours of sunshine these cities have in a year.

The charts below show the average temperatures in 12 months in three cities and how many hours of sunshine these cities have in a year.
The line chart depicts the mean
temperature
of the air yearly among three cities (
London
, New
York
and Sydney),
on the other hand
, the table demonstrates the general annual hours of sun for these three cities. It is remarkable that
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only Sydney performs the opposite situation of
temperature
in 12 months compared to
London
and New
York
. New
York
has the longest hours of sunshine. In
London
, the mean
temperature
starts and ends at around 10 at the first and end of the year,
while
the degree arrives at its peak at nearly 23 in July. New
York
has not only the lowest
temperature
at only 5 in January and December, that of owning the highest degree at 30 in July; especially in April and in November, the figures for
London
and New
York
reach the same point nearly to 10.
In contrast
, the air
temperature
of Sydney dwindles from January to July and
then
rises between July and December. When it comes to the gross hours of sunshine annually,
London
has the least
temperature
at 1180,
whereas
those of New
York
and
Sydneyshows
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Sydney shows
remain at 2535 and 2473 separately, which
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than double that of
London
.
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